My Beloved Close Friend
I
have a
close friend who has unique characteristics. She is Nihayah Imawati, but I call
her Nida. I knew her firstly when I met at University of Prof. Dr. Hamka in
2009; therefore, I knew her very well. In my opinion, she is clever, funny, and
kind. She always wants to know about new things that she does not know.
Besides, she can be a good listener for me; moreover, she always gives me the
best problem solving. I am also proud her because she never despair to get the
best everything in her life. Actually, she always reminds me if I forget about
important things; however, she often forgets about important things too. Honestly,
I like confusion with her feeling because she sometimes does not tell me about
her condition, and she can change her feeling easily everyday. But overall, I am happy when we do everything
together, and I am proud have a friend like her.
Wow, I am the unique girl?
BalasHapusmmmhh, I think I am the odd girl mpi :D hhihhihhi
ok, it's nice. In your paragraph, u use compound sentence and using conjunctive adverbs to join the clauses, right?
Ohh Mpi, u forgot to underline where is the topic sentence and analyze the topic also controlling idea.
full of compound sentences....It's good..
BalasHapusbut, I think there is 1 mistake.."I am also proud her ....It should be " I am also proud of her ...
Missing "Of"..
Couldn't agree more with Aya and Hagi. It's neat writing! It's good to use compound, but using mix types of sentences is better. Do it next time, dear. It's already good in the sense u systematically develop ur topic sentence. Nevertheless, in some ways, ur vocabulary is still interfered by ur Bahasa...it sounds so Indonesian. Let's take this example "I like confusion with her feeling" Instead of writing so, using these sentences sound more natural ''Sometimes, I get difficulty in understanding what she feels'', or "Sometimes i cannot guess what's on her mind". So, u have to be more aware to the choice of words in the next writing, ok! Good.
BalasHapus